"And the word was with God."
"And the word WAS God."
If this is true I need the word.
Scratch that.
I need words.
Strachan once said "words have more power than atom bombs."
I pray to Word he was right.
Cause I'm getting in a B-2 Bomber and flying around the world.
I've found a better way to end wars.
You can be my co-pilot, cause I don't think I can do this alone.
We're gonna drop words like bombs.
Drop 'em over Afghanistan, Iraq, Darfur, Palestine, Israel, North Korea, South Korea, the United states.
Tell Mom and Dad not to wait up, this may take a while.
We're gonna send shock-waves around the world.
They'll knock down dictators like dominoes.
Bring 'em to they're knees.
Let's hope they know what to do once they're on 'em.
Our speeches will spread like wildfire.
Burnin' up backwards ideologies soaked in a century's worth of oil.
We're gonna blaze new trails -- they'll all lead home.
And when it's all said and done, we're still gonna need our words.
We're always gonna need our Word.
And we're gonna knead our words.
Knead them into dough.
But not the kind we're used to.
You can't buy politicians with this kind of dough.
This kind rises.
And raises too.
Raises spirits, raises questions, raises men from the dead.
That's right I'm talking about making bread.
Baking bread.
Breaking bread.
We've been using the same ingredients for two millenia now.
It'll come hot out of the oven smellin' fresh,
Like a new idea.
The way only revolution can.
And we'll all sit down around the table and he'll say,
"Take."
"Eat."
"This is my body broken for you."
Amen.
Good work. It's straightforward and strong. You have a conceit that sort of evolves from beginning to end (words -> bombs -> bread) but in a simple and natural way. If you could bring it back around to the original starting point - words - I think it would make a nice frame for the poem. Maybe tie bread back to words and/or bombs again somehow, so it feels like the imagery has come full circle, rather than leaving off with bread. The quotes at the beginning and end do already serve as a sort of frame. But I think it will make the piece hit harder if you bring back an early image. Either way, well done.
ReplyDeleteAwesome, Chester!
ReplyDeletethanks guys.
ReplyDeleteand billy, that seems to be the reoccurring issue with my writing. let's get together sometime and maybe you can give me some pointers. i agree that it needs to come full circle, but i need help making it do that without it seeming forced. i'm generally free, so next time you feel like you have more wisdom than you know what to do with give me a call.